Opening improvements

I have been given a few improvement suggestions for my film opening such as using a basic white font and having the text in a fixed position which I will be doing in the following week. I will have a control group watch my opening and comment on it so I get some audience feedback. I've also been suggested to remove the 'POV' part of the opening which I am skeptical about but I am considering it, if it ruins the total effect of the narrative drive. Also the dialogue may also be removed as it does ruin the lonely atmosphere and the slowly unwinding narrative, rather than just jumping straight into the story it takes it's time so the viewers emphasize with 'John' more.